A Short Story

Over the past couple of days when I haven't been looking and applying for jobs I've been writing a short story. It's something I want to enter into the Telegraph Short Story Competition - each month they choose a winner and then the 12 winners get the opportunity to go to London and meet publishers who may be interested in publishing the story. It has to be under 2,000 words, and I've just finished writing mine today. I have a few more days until it has to be submitted, so if anyone's interested in reading it and giving me their feedback let me know and I'll post it on here :)